Raymond walks into the comic book store with his shoes
untied and plastic hammer that looks like a replica of the mighty Thor’s hammer
hanging out of his back pocket.
Store clerk
Hey son, tie your
shoe.
Didn’t your mother
teach you to keep your shoes tied? You’re going to ruin your laces.
Raymond
Oh! Thanks for
letting me know Mr. (long silence)
Store clerk
Shed, I’m Mr. Shed
Raymond
Thanks Mr. Shed, but
my foster mom hasn’t really taught me much of anything.
I just stay out of
her way and fight off the frost giants with my hammer.
Shed
I see
I’ve noticed you
playing in the park across the street a lot.
It looks like you
have a lot of fun.
Raymond
FUN!?
I don’t have fun over
there; I’m too busy saving the world from the frost giants to think about having
fun!
Shed
Oh, my mistake.
I would hate for the
frost giants to get in my store, thanks for protecting me.
Raymond
It is but a duty to
my people, Mr. Shed
Raymond leaves the store to head over to the park with his
plastic hammer in his hand. Meanwhile Mr. Shed contemplates Raymond’s
situation.
(In Sheds
thoughts)
This poor kid
He’s obviously way
too old to be carrying around a plastic Thor’s hammer
I see this kid
everyday, and never is he with anyone.
He comes in here to
read these comics and goes over to play by himself in the park
I feel bad for him
That night after Mr. Shed closed
the store. He went home to his 50 empty bottles of liquor scattered across his
apartment, and leftover popcorn kernels all over the recliner and floor. His
carpets were multicolored from all of the stains over the years.
He peers at the only picture on the wall, containing a
woman, in the arms of himself, with smiles on both of their faces. Indicating a
sense of remorse and sorrow.
Mr. Shed opens another bottle of gut rot whiskey, and begins
to sip while he watches Shark Week shows on Animal Planet.
The next day Mr. Shed gets up early
and heads over to the comic book store 2 hours before the opening time. He sits
on the bench out front and casually looks around at the people and smiles,
indicating he was thinking about the woman in the photograph. Over in the park
he notices a boy balled up in the corner of a park bench crying and alone. He
can see that under the bench lied Thor’s hammer. Mr. Shed approached the boy
casually.
Shed
Son!?
What are you doing over here? Shouldn’t you be in school?
Raymond jumps, and looked up
startled that someone was speaking to him.
Raymond
Yes,
but I didn’t think anyone would notice if I was gone today
Its
not like they even notice when I am there.
Mr. Shed looks down at Raymond
noticing a black eye forming and a little swelling. His pants were mildly wet
and dirty from what appears to be falling on the ground.
Shed
How
did you get that black eye?
Are
you ok?
Raymond
Yeah
I’ll
be ok.
Just
some kids on my way to school.
They
didn’t like what I was wearing, and so I hit one of them with my hammer
There
was too many frost giants with them this time.
Shed
Come
on in the store, ill open up early today, you need to get cleaned up
They walk over to the store go inside, and Raymond heads to
the bathroom to wash the dirt off his hands. Raymond comes back into the set.
Raymond
My name is Raymond
I noticed you never
got my name, and you keep calling me “son”
Shed
True
I was wondering what
your name was, but I figured if you wanted me to know you’d tell me
Do those kids give
you a hard time often?
Raymond
Usually everyday, but
I don’t usually get beat up like this.
The power of Thor
works in mysterious ways
You never know when
the hammer will empower you
You have to be worthy
of its might
Shed
Yes, you do
I too wielded the
mighty hammer once
But that was a long
time ago, and that story takes some time
Raymond
I sure would like to
hear it some time Mr. Shed, but I think I should get to school
Shed
One second Raymond!
Here, I have a gift
for you that might help
Mr. Shed walks into the back room and brings out an old pair
of glasses that looked as if they were from the 70’s
Shed
Now look
These are
invisibility glasses
They were acquired
from the downfall of Mr. Evil
I was lucky enough to
get my hands on them
As long as you wear
these nobody can see you
You must be careful
though, because they can still hear you
Raymond
ARE YOU SERIOUS?
YOUR GONNA LET ME
HAVE THOSE?
Those other kids
aren’t gonna give me any trouble anymore before school
Shed
Yep!
Just keep in mind,
they’re old like me, and may not work all of the time, but most of the time
they do
Raymond reached in his back pocket and pulled out Thor’s
hammer. Stared at it for a moment, and handed it to Mr. Shed
Raymond
Will you hold on to
this for me?
Because you were a
previous wielder of Thor’s hammer, I will let you use it to fight the frost
giants off of your store.
Mr. Shed accepted, and smiled.
Raymond headed off to school with his new glasses excitedly.
Mr. Shed closed up the store that night and hung Thor’s
hammer by the door so Raymond could see that he put it there to ward off the
frost giants. Mr. Shed went home that night to his sloppy and disgusting
apartment. He sat in his dirty old recliner in front of the T.V and looked up
at the photograph. He smiled at it, and got up and threw his full bottle away
and went to bed.
Shed
Thank you dear
You’ve always been
there for me.
I really enjoyed reading this play. I thought you did a really great job with progression throughout the play. It was great that you were able to provide a background for each of the characters. Within the text it was obvious that both characters were hurting in some way. You did a great job of providing each character happiness by the end of the play from the exchange of the glasses and hammer. Lastly, I enjoyed the character choice that you were able to utilize. I thought it was great that an older man and a young boy were able to gain so much from each other even though they were strangers and so different.
ReplyDelete-Benjamin Amoyal
I really liked your scene. The background of the character came out through the conversations between one another. It seems like you did some research and really made each character different. While reading your scene it almost feels like i was a part of the story. Great job. I feel that i want to read more of the scene and find out what happens to the younger man.
ReplyDeleteGreat scene! I enjoyed reading this piece. You really brought the characters to life throughout the scene. The sentimental meaning in the end was good too. I liked how you made both characters help one another in some way. I think that was a great touch to the scene. Great work.
ReplyDelete-Chanierah
I thought this was a great scene. I was immediately drawn into the scene with the first line. Being a big comic book fan, the second I saw that word, I was excited to read the scene. The story was great, the characters where great,and I liked the ending a lot. Your work is always really great, and I am excited to read your next one.
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