Sunday, October 11, 2015

Damaged

A play for those who have been broken -Charles Richmond-


Raymond walks into the comic book store with his shoes untied and plastic hammer that looks like a replica of the mighty Thor’s hammer hanging out of his back pocket.

Store clerk
Hey son, tie your shoe.
Didn’t your mother teach you to keep your shoes tied? You’re going to ruin your laces.

Raymond
Oh! Thanks for letting me know Mr. (long silence)

Store clerk
Shed, I’m Mr. Shed

Raymond
Thanks Mr. Shed, but my foster mom hasn’t really taught me much of anything.
I just stay out of her way and fight off the frost giants with my hammer.

Shed
I see
I’ve noticed you playing in the park across the street a lot.
It looks like you have a lot of fun.

Raymond
FUN!?
I don’t have fun over there; I’m too busy saving the world from the frost giants to think about having fun!

Shed
Oh, my mistake.
I would hate for the frost giants to get in my store, thanks for protecting me.

Raymond
It is but a duty to my people, Mr. Shed

Raymond leaves the store to head over to the park with his plastic hammer in his hand. Meanwhile Mr. Shed contemplates Raymond’s situation.

(In Sheds thoughts)
This poor kid
He’s obviously way too old to be carrying around a plastic Thor’s hammer
I see this kid everyday, and never is he with anyone.
He comes in here to read these comics and goes over to play by himself in the park
I feel bad for him

That night after Mr. Shed closed the store. He went home to his 50 empty bottles of liquor scattered across his apartment, and leftover popcorn kernels all over the recliner and floor. His carpets were multicolored from all of the stains over the years.
He peers at the only picture on the wall, containing a woman, in the arms of himself, with smiles on both of their faces. Indicating a sense of remorse and sorrow.
Mr. Shed opens another bottle of gut rot whiskey, and begins to sip while he watches Shark Week shows on Animal Planet.
The next day Mr. Shed gets up early and heads over to the comic book store 2 hours before the opening time. He sits on the bench out front and casually looks around at the people and smiles, indicating he was thinking about the woman in the photograph. Over in the park he notices a boy balled up in the corner of a park bench crying and alone. He can see that under the bench lied Thor’s hammer. Mr. Shed approached the boy casually.

Shed
Son!? What are you doing over here? Shouldn’t you be in school?

Raymond jumps, and looked up startled that someone was speaking to him.

Raymond
Yes, but I didn’t think anyone would notice if I was gone today
Its not like they even notice when I am there.

Mr. Shed looks down at Raymond noticing a black eye forming and a little swelling. His pants were mildly wet and dirty from what appears to be falling on the ground.

Shed
How did you get that black eye?
Are you ok?

Raymond
Yeah
I’ll be ok.
Just some kids on my way to school.
They didn’t like what I was wearing, and so I hit one of them with my hammer
There was too many frost giants with them this time.

Shed
Come on in the store, ill open up early today, you need to get cleaned up

They walk over to the store go inside, and Raymond heads to the bathroom to wash the dirt off his hands. Raymond comes back into the set.

Raymond
My name is Raymond
I noticed you never got my name, and you keep calling me “son”

Shed
True
I was wondering what your name was, but I figured if you wanted me to know you’d tell me
Do those kids give you a hard time often?

Raymond
Usually everyday, but I don’t usually get beat up like this.
The power of Thor works in mysterious ways
You never know when the hammer will empower you
You have to be worthy of its might

Shed
Yes, you do
I too wielded the mighty hammer once
But that was a long time ago, and that story takes some time

Raymond
I sure would like to hear it some time Mr. Shed, but I think I should get to school

Shed
One second Raymond!
Here, I have a gift for you that might help

Mr. Shed walks into the back room and brings out an old pair of glasses that looked as if they were from the 70’s

Shed
Now look
These are invisibility glasses
They were acquired from the downfall of Mr. Evil
I was lucky enough to get my hands on them
As long as you wear these nobody can see you
You must be careful though, because they can still hear you

Raymond
ARE YOU SERIOUS?
YOUR GONNA LET ME HAVE THOSE?
Those other kids aren’t gonna give me any trouble anymore before school

Shed
Yep!
Just keep in mind, they’re old like me, and may not work all of the time, but most of the time they do

Raymond reached in his back pocket and pulled out Thor’s hammer. Stared at it for a moment, and handed it to Mr. Shed
Raymond
Will you hold on to this for me?
Because you were a previous wielder of Thor’s hammer, I will let you use it to fight the frost giants off of your store.

Mr. Shed accepted, and smiled.
Raymond headed off to school with his new glasses excitedly.
Mr. Shed closed up the store that night and hung Thor’s hammer by the door so Raymond could see that he put it there to ward off the frost giants. Mr. Shed went home that night to his sloppy and disgusting apartment. He sat in his dirty old recliner in front of the T.V and looked up at the photograph. He smiled at it, and got up and threw his full bottle away and went to bed.
Shed
Thank you dear
You’ve always been there for me.

4 comments:

  1. I really enjoyed reading this play. I thought you did a really great job with progression throughout the play. It was great that you were able to provide a background for each of the characters. Within the text it was obvious that both characters were hurting in some way. You did a great job of providing each character happiness by the end of the play from the exchange of the glasses and hammer. Lastly, I enjoyed the character choice that you were able to utilize. I thought it was great that an older man and a young boy were able to gain so much from each other even though they were strangers and so different.
    -Benjamin Amoyal

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  2. I really liked your scene. The background of the character came out through the conversations between one another. It seems like you did some research and really made each character different. While reading your scene it almost feels like i was a part of the story. Great job. I feel that i want to read more of the scene and find out what happens to the younger man.

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  3. Great scene! I enjoyed reading this piece. You really brought the characters to life throughout the scene. The sentimental meaning in the end was good too. I liked how you made both characters help one another in some way. I think that was a great touch to the scene. Great work.
    -Chanierah

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  4. I thought this was a great scene. I was immediately drawn into the scene with the first line. Being a big comic book fan, the second I saw that word, I was excited to read the scene. The story was great, the characters where great,and I liked the ending a lot. Your work is always really great, and I am excited to read your next one.

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